When my eyes close I still see,
the pain that you gave to me.
Though all that I have done,
you left me to go to that one.
I gave to you all that I could be,
and you decide to walk on me.
Beaten down with no where to go,
I will inflict my punishment very slow.
In every way you said you were right,
but in the end you will see death this night.
Go with your friends and laugh and play,
because you will not see the end of the next day.
I will cater to your ego and bend to your need,
but know before all is done I will kill your seed.
Take from you what you wanted so,
in the end you will never see your child grow.
Dream please go right a head but
after all is said you will be dead
At first, I will act like I need you
then when you think of our love I will do what I have to do.
Looking at me with the love of all our years,
you will close your eyes and I will bring to life your fears.
tossing and turning in bed,
I will whisper this poem to your head.
and as your eyes wake from the soft echo of my voice,
I will cast you down with the weapon of my choice.
a simple slip of the wrist,
will cast your life in a tortured twist.
as the blood flows and you know not what to do,
I will get up grab my case and say ado.
Ooo twisted! I loved the ending even though the beginning really didnt capture my attemtion. You over used the word "I" which threw of the flow for me in my opinion. Other than that you expressed yourself nicely and I could imagine everything you were saying. Well done.
I'm not so sure the "love" category is right for this poem. I agree with Raindrops, it is a bit creepy.
HOWEVER, saying that, I did love it. ^_^ At first I was a bit "WTF, what is he doing with this?" but as I read on, something about it made me grin [in a cheeky fashion]. It had a mixture of themes within it, I think. I don't really know, but something worked in it, I just can't fingerpoint what I liked most.