One More Moment

by Robert   Oct 25, 2004


Just this one moment I ask this from you,
just one more time to show you my love is true.
I will set aside all the word of anger you have said,
just grant me this last place in time before I am dead.
I will not proclaim the hate I feel inside,
let me hold you close and have you be at my side.
You left me when I needed you the most,
far across the states to another coast.
In tears I begged you to come just this one last time,
forget your hate and I will forgive your crime.
Take my hand like you have done before,
see into my dieing eyes and see into my heart’s core.
I have loved no other like I have ever loved you,
now life has set its stage for me and I know what I must do.
My body weakens and my spirit can now be laid to rest,
for lover, friend and mate you are the very best.
I close my eyes and whisper these last words to you,
for I have and will always love you.

Written By
Robert Lee Niswander
Copyright 2004

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  • 18 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "I close my eyes and whisper these last words to you,
    for I have and will always love you."

    ^^I don't like that ending.

    The flow is flawless throughout the entire piece right up until there were you rhymed ''you'' with ''you'' and it disrupts it terribly.

    Apart from that however, this is perfect.
    It's beautiful and heartfelt, and written very well.

  • 18 years ago

    by Tammie

    Another sweet poem you have here. Again, it really shows your strong love for this person and you penned this very well. Put a smile on my face to see such love for someone. :]

    Tammie

  • 18 years ago

    by Blissful

    This was just beautiful. The emotions described were so powerful and deep.

    "In tears I begged you to come just this one last time,
    forget your hate and I will forgive your crime."
    ^That was my fave lines, they flowed beautifully.

    Well done *5/5*

  • 18 years ago

    by Sandra D

    Oh, so sweet.
    this seems like something i've thought of before, like all of this was going through my head... wow, youre pyschic!
    anywho... i love the subject, the rhymes were great... but again, the flow seem a little jumpy, not too much but it threw me off a little... amazing job with this one
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaila

    This poem was pretty good
    I think there were some errors..
    i mean where the rhyming seemed a bit forced
    but that's ok
    you did a good job
    5/5

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