God If your There?

by Dark Savior   Dec 16, 2004


God if you are there
please just give a care
what did i do to piss you off
please tell me I'll stop

God if your there
would you please stop here
i want a few things in my life
can you answer me this night?

i want to know what i did to you
i am not going to ask for much
someone to hold and to touch
it seem to always wear the wrong shoe

i hope you are real not like Santa
i pray that i have not been mislead
then why would i get out of bed?
you'd be a story i have never read

i know that i don't go to church
a lot of the times i seem to curse
sometimes even in your name
i know i shouldn't take you in vain

so please the next time your there
please just lend one helping ear
see if you can help me out just abit
i can't find this eternal marriage bliss

every time i try to get up i just fall in pits
i feel like I'm surrounded by a wall of bricks.
i know that there is a problem with all of this
i know there are people worse then me, but just please!

so if you hear my pray just listen
i am not asking you out of reason
all i ask for is a little bit of your time
but doing this rhythm doesn't erase my crime

my crime isn't punishable by law
it's suicide I'm sorry for it all
i know you are very busy
but next time please just listen.....

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  • 19 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    Thank you very much for your imput both of you. i will try to work on those things Kevin. I thought i was doing a decent job...and this poem...i stuck away from metaphores, i am tired of metaphores that i write and no one gets them, this one i just wrote it and that was it.

    Emotion...well i lack that.

    Philosophy is never something i am bad at as of late.

  • 19 years ago

    by Kevin

    I like what you are writing about.

    The structure is very irractic, and i don't think it's done with any special intention. The flow jumps from one beat to another without reason and there is no metaphor...no strong descriptive movements.

    Philisophical, and i love that...but i think it needs a second or third draft.

  • This is really good..Sad...Keep on writting okay!