The First To Cry.

by VampyraKi†   Jun 11, 2005


The tender cry I hear
Is music to my ear
I know you live for the sound
I know you are still there
Waiting for me to come and scare
Away the dreams of loneliness and despair

Slowly you drift back asleep
To find the softest of dreams
Of unicorns with angel wings
Not to wake for a long while
And by then I will have fallen to dream
But I didnt see life's scheme

All the sadness of our death
Rains on the world that we left
The sounds of screams all the night
And we both fought for our life
The fires that burned up our home
Left us to the darkness to roam

Our lives that ended so suddenly
Left so much pain and agony
Everyone is gone to their families
Knowing their turn may be near
They all wanted to hold who’s dear

My lovely one I’m sorry for our end
I never meant for us to die
And cause you to suffer and cry
Try to find happiness in this dark time
And never let our memory go
So that we will always know
You were there when the flames died
And you were the first that cried

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  • 18 years ago

    by Loulou

    Most of the stanzas like the first one were a little messed up but all in all
    great poem

    love always
    tabby

  • 18 years ago

    by Dreams

    Ah.. I like this one, so much truths behind the lines. The flow is there in this poem, good job. =)

    'dispair' --> 'despair'

    Very dark and sad. Good stuff! =D

  • 18 years ago

    by Unrequited

    that was a great poem with an interesting rhyme scheme! the only line i would change is "But I didn't see life's scheme"... i'm not sure how it fits into the poem, but maybe it just needs a little explanation for me! but it is a 5!

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashli

    this will be the shortest comment i'll ever leave, but there's only one word that completely sums up this poem: beautiful!

  • 18 years ago

    by Leah20

    This was okay. I can't stress enough that constant or almost constant or none at all rhyme scheme are soo important. And the rhyme scheme of this poem was vary sporadic and hard to follow. Work on maintaining constant rhyme scheme. I really liked the first three lines "The tender cry I hear
    Is music to my ear
    I know you live for the sound" and based on that I know that you could write amazing poetry if there were a more constant rhyme scheme. Keep writing!

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