Starlit Sorrow

by ---AL---   Jul 12, 2005


Starlit Sorrow

Twinkle, twinkle these very stars,
For, you and I had called them ours,
Yet, staggers still in riling sky
Reminding me of your goodbye,
And for always that one night,
Where hand in hand, it all seemed right
For, after came my very first,
When we kissed in blissful burst,
And suddenly the stars aligned,
Till destiny became maligned,
And rip in two the coupled star,
To leave me here in wicked mar,
Burdened by my lonesome curse
To know it's gone from best to worst,

So now I stare at twinkling tine,
Knowing well your were not mine,
Because I lived a life in dream,
For even if a star does gleam,
It could be dead for such a time,
For make and break is such a rhyme,
And only when the light does stop,
Can you face the final drop,
To be lost with only mar,
Seeking help through northern star,
But even still, it will no do,
So long as i still think of you,

Even if, you're gone from here,
I'll show my love with every tear,
For never is it one's intent,
To make a path to where you went,
Six feet down, beneath the ground,
For when he drank he struck you down
So Six days gone, since brutal death,
When you made your closing breathe,
Because your dad had struck you dead,
And placed you here in casket bed,
With me above your lonesome grave,
Wondering why I couldn’t save,
As twinkle still our favorite star,
To remind me that you aren't far,
And for always still, our one year,
When you and I where both still here,
But then you went to different place,
Forever with the stars in space.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Switchblade89

    Very good.Your good at writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by *rach*and*bee*

    oh, is that true? its so sad!
    hey its me hun, i tried emailing u but it didn't work. i miss u so i read some more of ur wonderful poems, i really like this one. whoever the girl in the poem was she must have been very lucky to have u.
    rock on, write always,
    *hugs and kisses for u*
    luv u more than chocolate milkshakes,
    <3 *rach* <3

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha

    Once again I have to commend you on your gigantic talent. My only nitpickings...Third line from the end "where" should be "were", and throughout the poem you change from "she" to "you", though I'm assuming they're both the same person you're referring to. I suggest fixing that, it's not a good habit or a proper thing to do in any form of writing.

    But otherwise it was a very, very good poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by ღ Christina ღ

    Very good poem! It flowed nicely like all the other poems you have written!

  • 18 years ago

    by blackrose1011

    I like this poem, i realy like the first two lines. they hit a personal note with me. It is very sad. I love how its starts to sound like a breack up, and then, its about how she passed away, and it killed you to lose her. It is just a wonderful poem. One the best i have read on this subject. nicely written. great use of imager to link the ideas.

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