Untitled "Angels & Animals"

by Dave   Sep 30, 2005


Rusted life bruised bent roted burnt and scorned
crying baby never having its last wish fulfilled
misery sadness and joy never to be had
dark night never to be day lost in time
walk in the shadow that night does not cast
broken smile weeping mind lost nights of sleep
over and over and over I go only lost in dream
never surrendering pain no meaning never a tear
bitter life granted its wish of an end
wings that carry sins of the father
words drift home historic tales afar
masked leaders tremble no rebellious assault
change in tide walls will fall in turn
history's few remembered on broken wing
revolution of the spirit departed from your soul
creating the modern original dream set aloft
DISAPPEARING DISAPPROVING DESPITE last DEFENSE
time spent approaching days that have past
poisoned meaning fate lost hate abounds in wells
irony divides a nation from its self
twist dive down around and Thur
gentle and slow forever lost passions
struck with cold abandons rage
an enemy of the state the battle lost
war will wage from altered plains
truce and peace without restraint
a devil will fall a hero's badge will disgrace
tested and proved with never a weary cry
words said under confused tears anger abounds
memories of lullaby's child's life fades
goodnight without dream sorrow abandon hope

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  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Interesting title you have here really caught my eye. The imagery was fantastic and the metaphors were great. Good job~mel

  • 18 years ago

    by Renee

    I absolutely love this. I could picture someone reading that in a poetry reading or something to that effect. It says a lot about life. It's like everything flows together perfectly, but its not at all about the same thing. Great job on this Dave.

    Take Care,
    Renee

  • 18 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    Great job the flow could use some work but i love the part where you said "DISAPPEARING DISAPPROVING DESPITE last DEFENSE"...that was really cool...5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Carmen

    From what i'm getting from this poem, im guessing its about war. i think you should place commas and semicolons because a lot of the sentances are hard to read because they just run on, without any separation. its hard to tell whether they're seperate items or all one thing, but i think i found the places that commas and semicolons should've been added. otherwise, nice poem. i loved all the description and different objects of pain and misery you've described. very nice.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    I liked the not rhyming aspect of this poem there were many metaphors i think so this could be taken many different ways...very cool....

    masked leaders tremble no rebellious assault
    change in tide walls will fall in turn

    those lines were so neat i loved them your so descriptive your vocasb is amazing i have nothing to bad to say 5/5