by BeeJay Oct 9, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
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If only you were here with me |
by Rolo
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Once again, good expression. The flow was a bit off at times, but you pulled it off at the end. The personal feeling it gives to the reader is what makes it stand out. You have some good stuff going on for you, keep writing. |
by Chelsi
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Great job!!! Hope your doin better!! Stay strong and keep your head up!! I can relate!! You are an awesome writer!! Keep writing!! 5/5 |
by the middle
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Great poem! |
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Wow, thats excellent. 5/5 I almost started crying |
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I like your whole poem but these are my favorite lines: |