Did You See Me, Daddy?

by Atomic   Jan 22, 2006


Did you see me, daddy?

I just took my first few steps,
-My chubby legs almost gave away.-

Did you see me, daddy?

Today was my first day of school,
-Nobody invited your daughter to play.-

Did you see me, daddy?

I just got my first art award,
-I painted a picture of a happy you.-

Did you see me, daddy?

I just performed right on stage,
-You weren't anywhere in view.-

Did you see me, daddy?

I was introduced to drugs today,
-You haven't said that it was wrong.-

Did you see me, daddy?

I fainted on my way to school,
-You weren't there to make me strong.-

Did you see me, daddy?

I fought with a razor blade today,
-I lost the fight without trying.-

Did you see me, daddy?

I was drowning in a pool of blood,
-I had no idea that I was dying.-

Did you see me, daddy?

I cried at my own funeral,
-I was the only one who attended.-

Did you see me, daddy?

I died with a smile on my face,
-I wasn't as happy as I pretended.-

Do you see me now, daddy?

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!©

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  • 15 years ago

    by Not Enough

    Wow, that's amazing. It's incredibly sad. But I love it. I love the story, and the way it was written. Very well done. The flow was amazing. The rhymes were perfect. the whole idea of the poem almost made me cry. Good job.

    Soda E>

  • 15 years ago

    by Marcus blake

    This is just deep damn your crazy amazing 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Isis

    It's beautiful!

  • 17 years ago

    by KayTOTS

    Aww. thats so sad, i love it. =[

    cuz the 'did you see me daddy' makes it sound so innocent, and then everything inbetween those lines contrasts that.

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Wonderfully written peice, great form and flow. the structure really adds strengh to the peice and the emotions are very strong.

    5/5