Precious Gift

by Atomic   Aug 20, 2006


He was my teacher.
-She was my student-

I fell hard for him.
-I fell harder for her-

We met outside of school.
-My heart raced every time-

Everything was great.
-So great it was perfect-

But then one day...
-I ended it suddenly-

I asked and begged him why.
-I can't tell her now-

Is I because I'm too young?
-My mind screamed "No"-

Is it because he doesn't love me?
-My heart ached "No"-

Is it because I'm his student?
-My career told her "No"-

Is it me at all?
-No-

Why did he do it?
-I have to-

It was breaking my heart.
-I know-

I found out about the wedding.
-It wasn't our wedding-

I was not the bride.
-She should be-

The bride was pretty.
-Not compared to her-

I went to his wedding.
-She went to my wedding-

I know he saw me.
-I saw her-

I left them a gift.
-She left me a gift-

It was wrapped in tears.
-Her tears-

I hate him.
-I love her-

I hate her.
-I hate her-

I hate...
-She's pregnant-

I don't want to look at him.
-I had to marry her-

He also left me a gift.
-Why is she walking away?-

A precious gift.
-Stay!-

A gift without a name.
-No!-

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

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  • 10 years ago

    by Marcus blake

    That was dope good poem atomic I remember you you stop writing poetry for a little then came back good to see real writing again :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Nanita

    That was deep.. very deep. It felt very realistic the way it is written.. Really great peice of writing (:

  • 13 years ago

    by Ariana

    I really enjoyed this for different reasons. I liked how you have two separate characters speaking. This is the first piece I've read ever on this site that is able to pull this off which is impressive. I also liked the scenario and how you create characters with depth despite only having a short space to work with. It doesn't sound cliched at all and all the lines fit in perfectly. I was also impressed with how much detail you put in despite only having two lines for each stanza. The only part I did not understand was which girl was pregnant. Excellent stuff anyways, I liked it.

    -Ariana

  • 14 years ago

    by Amanda Bee

    This had me on the edge of my seat all the way until the end. It's so sad, he loved her but he couldn't be with her. Awwww... I kind of feel sorry for the bride too a little bit (but just a little). I really enjoyed this piece.

  • 14 years ago

    by David

    Absolutely GORGEOUSLY written! rich in emotion and... just GREAT! 5/5

    well done!