Watching life

by Jon Hunt   Mar 25, 2006


Watching life through evil eyes,
You sit, uptight, and despise,
And hate the world that gave you life,
And try this time not to survive.

For you tried before,
And you try once more,
"this life ain't worth living
there's nothing left to believe in"

And this knife your savior;
Taints you skin.
This life, this labor;
Won't let you win.

But don't give up,
You can't lose hope!
We try and help you;
Help you cope.
But you turn around,
Ignore what's good,
And act just like,
You think you should.

And I say to you,
As many would.
This life is better,
I wish you understood.

But you turn on me,
Insult my being.
And continue again,
Right from the beginning

So take back the words,
You made to break;
My heart, my soul;
With words so fake.
And Give back the lives,
You stole with hate,
And fix yourself,
This isn't fate.

I care for you,
Perhaps you don't know.
I'll help you through;
Just follow the flow.

***** Extended****
And one day soon,
i hope to show,
show to you what,
you just didnt know.

And maybe then,
you wont fear life,
Stand up, laugh and get about,
enjoy yourself, and destroy your knife.

*** thanks "lost laureate" i think i have made this better, maybe a better ending.... im not to sure ***

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lilly

    Well you just made it to my favorites list!! this poem says so much. it's beautiful in every way!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    I love your style. It is very unique and not like many poems i've read, that makes your poems very special and fun to read. This poem sent a strong message out to a few people im sure, even to myself. Keep it up! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Torn

    Yeh..great poem jon!
    i love the way you expressed how you felt without being too harsh on the person, because obviously you care about them. Yet you show the frustration very well.
    Love it!
    xoxoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by Torn

    Yeh..great poem jon!
    i love the way you expressed how you felt without being too harsh on the person, because obviously you care about them. Yet you show the frustration very well.
    Love it!
    xoxoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by Mona

    Wow. What a wonderful poem.

    Great use of words, wonderful flow, beautifully written.

    And so sweet =*( Very well done

    Loved it a lot!
    Keep up the good work

    Lotsaaaaaaa love
    -xxx-