X lost little girl x

Buring hot tears destroying the poor girls face,
still, dead inside she looks a disgrace,
the capture of sadness has reeled her in by a hook,
there is no fairytale ending to this depressing book,
heart beating heavily with the painful lump in her throat,
making her way silently to the door, she picks up her coat,
a tearful walk with pain slowing down her unused feet,
she feels like shes blind with the tears bloking what she sees,
this pain cant be contained like this any more,
her tears are bleeding, her heart is tore,
so she walks, until she reaches the river,
the smell of the air gives the girl a shiver,
she reminices of the stupid things shes done,
falling into the river she thinks,
there...... another girl gone.

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