You use the word angrily but then describe them as happy. Such a big contrast with nothing between the too. You may also want to limit words ending in -ly, for some reason they just throw some poems off. The rest of the poem was good though for some of your descriptions.
Very nicely written.. Very dark and sinister; just the way I Love it. You seem to have gotten downrated on this poem -- it's not a 4.5. Just remember you did very well on this poem. The lowest it should have ever gotten was a 4.9. But good job.