Eaten Alive. [Parquette]

by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG   Nov 20, 2006


Eaten Alive.

She got beneath my skin and she ate me alive,
As she whispered her words of disgust in my ears -
And watched the desperate tears fall from my eyes;
Leaving me with shattered hope to survive.

She got beneath my skin and she ate me alive,
Cut me down to dirt in front of all my peers -
And screamed to me that big girls do not cry;
Because it wouldn't get me through my years.

She got beneath my skin and she ate me alive,
As she gently sang me her twisted lullabies -
And laughed as she unleashed my greatest fears;
Watching as my heart slowly began to die.

She got beneath my skin and she ate me alive,
As she stared back at me from behind my mirror -
Snickering at my disgrace of a disguise;
And smiled as I believed all her pathetic lies.

© Jenna Elphick
November 19, 2006

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It has four stanzas, each containing four lines.The first line of the poem is repeated in every stanza as the first line. Each line except the first has 10-12 syllables. The rhyme scheme is "abcaabcbacbcabcc"

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  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    What a twist
    I have to admit i find parquetts very difficult to write. To date, i have only completed one of about eight attempts
    But you make it look easy.
    I didn't see the ending coming, when you mentioned the mirror however it all made sense.
    It's sad how people can make enemies of themselves and it's sad to think that so many people can relate to this. Once upon a time, me included.
    You did a wonderful job portraying the emotions throughout this poem about how people feel and how they manage to do this to themselves.. and how easy it is.
    However, i think i'm just rambling now. But this is easily one of my favourite poems from you.
    You deserve the 5/5
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    Good poem jenna. i love you sweety.
    and im always here for you never forget that.

  • 17 years ago

    by Elynnka

    Awesome poem!
    I love the form it's written in and I also like the wording and imagery.
    You're pretty good at writing poems with a specific form - good work!
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    Great work! loved the detailing and use of words. it was really good...painted a good picture. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    This is very good jenna, 5/5!!! love the cjoice of words, keep it up!!!

    Bryan,