Until Dreaming Ends

by ShootingStar179   Feb 6, 2007


Dreaming is so much better than reality,
Sweet violins echoing in the distance,
As I slowly step towards a man in a trance,
He grabs my hand,
And gently we dance.

It is a dream if only for tonight,
Nothing so sweet can ever be real,
Only dreams can express how I truly feel
This paradise can only last,
With an imaginary kiss as its seal

His dark eyes an element that makes it a dream,
So deep and so incredibly mysterious,
A real man would have ulterior purpose,
Hurt and pain would be my gain,
So many lies under the surface

Someday this will no longer be a reverie,
There will be a strong sweet man,
Standing with me,
So until I find a man who is as he seems,
I will see him here in my dreams.

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  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Very nice poem. It flowed nicely. the only error i found wasn't too big but it was punctuation, but then again that is up to the writer. great job. 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    His dark eyes an element that makes it a dream,
    So deep and so incredibly mysterious,
    A real man would have ulterior purpose,
    Hurt and pain would be my gain,
    So many lies under the surface

    Unlike the above posts, I chose this stanza as my favorite. I liked the flow and the rhythmn of the lines. The word choices were good. Not cliched at all.

    Well done, and congrats.
    Jeannie

  • 17 years ago

    by ReBecca

    Congrats!! That was very pretty, and I liked it because it was so heartfelt.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats on being readers choice. Excellent job! Loved this poem.

    Someday this will no longer be a reverie,
    There will be a strong sweet man,
    Standing with me,
    So until I find a man who is as he seems,
    I will see him here in my dreams.

    Really liked this stanza.
    Take care Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Lu

    Someday this will no longer be a reverie,
    There will be a strong sweet man,
    Standing with me,
    So until I find a man who is as he seems,
    I will see him here in my dreams'
    ^^^
    The two postings above me have made a wonderful choice in choosing their favorite part. I also love this part.

    Congrats on being chosen for the "Reader's Choice Award" Courtney

    Take care Hun
    Luanne

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