When you walk away

Just so you know, I wrote "Dreams Crash Down" before I read this poem. I didn't take "when you walked away" from your poem title, just to let you know :)

"My heart is lying in your hands"

Why does it always work out to be the guy's decision? You give everything to someone, and they toss it away like it doesn't matter. We do matter, us girls, we matter so much. You, my dear, matter so much, and if he doesn't see that, he's not worth having you. Take back your heart and wait for the one who will ask for it, and caress it in his arms, not just hold it in his hands. Take care my dear, good luck!

Very nice. it's quite short though...doens't matther i think, becuz the message came across that you wanted to say.it's really well written! keep it up

Ahhhhhh How sad...This really touched my heart.

Watching you walk away,
Tears cascading down these pale cheeks,
Did I make you run away?
What can I do to make you stay?

Excellent job on this write.
Take care Cindy

Without even noticing the girl who tries not to cry,
Over one friend who said he loved her by and by.

the last lines of a poem really make the whole piece. i was confused by the ending, i think it would b perfect if it was something like,

Without even noticing the girl who tries not to cry,
Over one friend who said he loved her but goodbye.

cute poem anyway, was really sweet!!

much love and many kisses,
bex