Deadly Photographs

I liked the repetition. And the flow. Everything. This is a bit different from your recent poems. I don't much like the spaced out lines in your new poems. :/
You had good word choice, and you kept everything together and didnt stay off very far from the topic.

Good job, Bri.

Ian

The repitition was amazing in this poem, so powerful. your vocab was great and the poem flowed.
i felt as if i was there watching this happen, the story told within this poem was really sad yet so well told.

I really liked the repitition of "Took life for granted; now it's gone in a flash", not only does it have great efftecy on the poem it is so true, and its a phrase that many people can relate to in their lives. I liekd the aliteration youve created in the first stanza, "Reminiscing or regretting?" again its very effective. The flow of the poem was really good, the words told a story, which is really sad yet excellently told. I also liked the overall rhythem of the poem, it was good and when i read it i could see it having a steady beat in my head. To improve it i suggest you use punctuation. Other then that an excellent read, keep them up! xx

Beautiful poem, alot of emotion, very touching and very sad. Good work!

I found the flow a little rocky in some places. The rhyme scheme is very unordinary, I liked it but it made the poem kind of hard to read. The trochaic foot was very well done, it stressed the first syllable (among others) in each line, which gave the poem more of a coppy rhymth, which i think matched your topic very well. I really like the repeatition on this line "Took life for granted; now it's gone in a flash" it seemed to take on a new tone each time it was read. I liked the way you left the end of the poem up to the imagination. Good work.

--Steph