I really like your poem.
this is excaly how i felt,
and it just made me feel very like,
i dont know, understanding to know
that im not the only one who has thought of that. i cant relly explain it.
but i really like this poem.
Well I'm not a critic or something, but for me, you are having trouble with your punctuations. You should learn abit more about when to use punctuations as for commas. Well I'm gonna give you 4/5 anyways..
12 years ago
by Tara Kay
I am not trying to be cruel, i am just being honest, i didnt like this one.
It didnt flow at all, each line seemed so forced, and there was no emotion. but you do have talent as i have seen in your other work.
"Sometimes hard and dark
Other times soft and light
But most the time in between."
I adored that tercet for being quite provocative. It actually is difficult if one stays in between, because you will only end up getting hurt by yourself and others. (I've learned that the other day, I suppose. Heh.)
Furthermore, I liked its set-up and diction. Methought that it was meant to be craggy, regardless of the author's writer's block, so to better portray one's feelings and emotions of depression. It was quite effective at least to me. =] A poignant write, m'dear. Thank you for sharing. All the best and take care, Marian.