Insane

by the come back   Jul 31, 2007


The night is so quiet
listening to mellow music
thinking of you with sad music
and remembering you with happy memories.

I can't promise you
that I'll love ya forever
but will do my best to try
it we can work together.

many problem passed me by,
many girls offered to be mine
but I denied them many times
because your the one my heart signed.

I wish that you love me too,
I wish that you want me also
I wish that you will be for ever
and I wish that my wish will come true.

pls make comment again and vote if you want my poem.......thnx....

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  • 16 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    I liked this poem but I think it could be much better. It has the emotion but that last stanza just drags the whole piece down which is a shame as it starts well.
    I would change it to something like
    " I wish that you loved me too
    that you would want me also
    to be with me forever
    for my wish to come true"
    This is only a suggestion though and it's your poem but that's what I think would make it better.

  • 16 years ago

    by Veamm

    Its great!!

    i can feel the despair..and the emotions..

    keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by lish

    Ur poems are really good keep it up
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I like the first stanza but you used word music twice in it, that leaves bad impression. (you can put sad melody) Ending isn't effective, the last stanza could be more powerful. This is just my opinion.

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I really liked this a lot. Good job.

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