Dull

by luv Shelbz luv   Aug 2, 2007


She thought her life was dull
Nothingness and worthless
She turned to the razor
to cover up the pain

She used that razor
until it got dull
then she turned to the pills
to cover up the pain

She used those pills
Until they became worthless
Then she turned to the bottle
To cover up the pain

She used that bottle
Until she realized
She didn't need to run from the pain
so she turned to some help
to face the pain

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  • 16 years ago

    by Chelsey

    At first i didn't think much about it.. But then i read between the line's and realized that you were trying to send some sort of message.
    Like, you were trying to say.. that everyone is going to fail and fail and fail, but eventuallyy we end up getting it right and it ends up okay in the end.
    atleast i hope thats what you were trying to say??
    anyways.
    all n' all it was good.
    keep writing.
    I've said that so many times, but its true.
    xoxo
    --CHelsey

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    I'm not too fond of the topic, but it is still a great poem. The flow flow was nicer that some of the other poems I've read. I do have one suggestion though, in the 3rd stanza where you used the word worthless a second time, try using another word [synnonym maybe]. I think it would be perfect then. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by Corruption

    Heya
    this was amazing!!!
    i love it
    it was soo good
    it grabs you attention right away
    and holds it till the end
    great job:D:D

    Keenan

  • 16 years ago

    by The Herald

    Emo?
    idk but no offense i didnt realy like it. i no others will now yell at me, but i cant get into something if i cant flow with it.
    i will not rate on the actual thing, but here i give a 4/5

    THE STORY ROCKED THOUGH

  • 16 years ago

    by Angela

    Enjoyed this alot... i love how you went from one to the other like that... good story, nicely written!!
    <3ang
    5/5

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