Please Help Me My Girl

by SuicideNotes2Poems   Aug 6, 2007


I bleed blood
out from my wrist
i don't remember how
i got like this
but now i regret the day
i met the knife
though it took me in
i know it will also take my life
my soul is empty
my dreams are full
my heart is open to you
but my life is dull
there is no one there
but you can make it better
in my life you can make the sun shine
in cloudy, rainy weather
pleas help me I'm dying
in this life of sorrow
i need you to help
to get me through tomorrow
just your presence
can make me live
and my hole heart
is what i will give
just help me baby
my life is in your arms today
and maybe just maybe
you'll keep me from harms way

Ricky

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  • 16 years ago

    by TillyMariex

    Aw i like a lot =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Another fine written piece by you. I think the flow was okay. I really like the message portrayed in this poem, good job. I have a suggestion.. Capitalize the I's and.. try to use more strong words.. like this..

    in (cloudy), rainy weather
    = Hazy

    One more thing ^_^
    (Their's) no one (their)
    = I think you mean There's 'there is'
    = try to change their to 'here'

    I can see that you have a potential in writing. You're talented. Keep up the good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah

    Nice poem

  • 16 years ago

    by TillyMariex

    Wow. evrything you write is so true. u rrly hav a gift. luv tha poem <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Wow this is really good very sad but i can relate....sooo much great job 5/5
    laura

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