Diamond In The Sand

At first, before reading, I thought that the poem would have odd flow in some areas. I was shocked after finishing it. Not really for the fact that the flow was off anywhere, but for the fact that it complimented the poem in a very nice way. I think this is a cute poem Gem. You tend to do that with even your sad poems. (Maybe not so much cute with them, but rather cleverness). I enjoy that about your writing. You can tell that you have an upbeat personality, and that's always a good thing.

Gem....what a beautiful and sweet love poem. All the emotions of true love are contained within your verses....from the title to the ending...it captures just how spectacular and rare true love can be......just like finding a diamond in the sand....

I like the nailing jelly to a tree and the pipe dream part. great job.

your servant:
david.

Aw sweet

"I found my diamond in the sand
And it's the most valuable diamond i could ever hope to own
It's you"

What a lovely way to sum it up! Such a beautiful poem, very truthful though. Although it can feel like its never gonna happen i believe that people are not destined to be alone. Although reminding myself of that can seem to be a bit of a challenge hee hee. Lovely poem, a beautiful little dedication to your love.

Kelly
xx

Last line is very effective, I don't like few lines but you said some wonderful things in this one. You really know how to describe emotions, I like it, it deserves 5/5