Faithless Road to Redemption.

by Fluffy   Jan 20, 2008


I see now, and a thousand moments after,
the joy I could have lived.
Is it too late to turn around and
see clear through the led printed perfection;
a dying reflection?
Faithless road to redemption...

The truth.
Too far and pondering South to a land
called 'nowhere':
a series of chain letters guiding my path.

Real; not quite.

Circling the pink lace embedded in my
summer dress; eyes in innocence mourned for
acceptance.
I'll only remember, now, the tender hand of my
Mother grace the locks that sat sound on
my shoulders on a lukewarm, spring day.

A quiet day.

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  • 16 years ago

    by limp

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  • 16 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This is very interesting. I've never seen a poem that was put like this. I mean you see the razor blade-emo stuff and the oh-my-gosh-i-love-you stuff.. but yours is unique. I enjoyed reading it .. thanks :)

    This is my favorite part:

    Is it too late to turn around and
    see clear through the led printed perfection;
    a dying reflection?
    Faithless road to redemption...

    Excellent Job

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    I just loved how flawlessly the whole poem flowed. It truly hooked me in and had me wanting more. Another poem that holds an immense amount of depth and lingers with the leader long after they have read it. It was filled with meaning and unique. It's refreshing to read some new poetry once in a while because most of the time they are about the same thing. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    Ahh highly enjoyable. I loved it mainly because it wasn't one of those overdone cliche poems I see so much. It was unique and meaningful.

    The imagery was very nice and tied the whole poem together in a picture perfect way. It flowed gently and effectively together all in a compact, but refreshing, package. job well done 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    When I read the first stanza I didn't see where this was headed, but once I finished this, and read it again, I loved it. The story you told within these words is beautiful, yet sad at the same time.

    The first stanza begins the story very nicely, with desperation in the words and a nice rhythm held in them too. I like how the last three lines rhyme, they work very well.

    The second stanza is small, yet it adds that extra bit of detail to this poem, I like it.

    Now the final stanza, I enjoyed this one most. The detail in your descriptions created gorgeous imagery here. I can literally imagine this happening. The final line there finished it nicely.

    I really enjoyed this piece. Overall you used great vocab, and a not so formatted style, yet it was very appropriate for this poem. Excellent piece. 5/5

    Tammie