This poem touches me so much. It's being a while that i havn't red a poem and before the end i had to take a pause to savor the beauty of such a sad , love poem like this. We all feels emotions, but not most of us could put it in words like you do. Very, very well done. Keep it up, kel.
Some of the grammar is a little off and periods seem to be used for style's sake but without regard for sentence structure. Other than that, I like the "Suffering isn't enough?" insertion. It struck me as curious and different - good things. I also like that you used the word "mountainous!" Very nice.