seem to kill
this burnt despair,
words that are poured to fill
the heart has no strength to repair,
loss, leaves lonely tears which no one can share-
occasions give way to unavoidable rain,
forever, a long time to be aware
that fate has robbed someone we care,
emptiness crawls and chills,
its frozen stare
and dark will
The Diatelle is a fun, syllable counting form like the etheree
with a twist. The syllable structure of the diatelle is as follows:
1/2/3/4/6/8/10/12/10/8/6/4/3/2/1, but unlike an ethere, has
a set rhyme pattern of abbcbccaccbcbba. This poetry form may
be written on any subject matter and looks best center aligned
in a diamond shape.
This form is one of the very best I have ever read!! Sadly no one noticed it but Michael maybe!!! Why do I say this; well my believe is when you write an Diatelle or a Etheree you must aim to one goal only and that would be to have every lines become a single line of statement :
I like the challenge of these strict forms. You have penned an excellent poem within the tight constrains.
A depression deeply rooted and one that medicines or conversations cannot cure. Tears fall and with them the acceptance of a constant dark shadowed soul.
3 years ago
Meena I have said it before and i'll say it again, you have such a way of writing about emotion that the reader is simply compelled to keep reading and reading, this is a wonderful form and as all form writing the best ones are the ones that don't read as a form, just a poem, as usual you have written a beautiful and provoking piece 5/5 all day long. Wonderful.
The form itself was just breathtaking! To be honest it could've been in free form and I would still have nominated this poem. It packs a punch in so little lines, taking you in a journey of cosmic proportions, the title itself is so bittersweet mayhap because I love rain or because it's; whatever the case may be I still adore this poem. This poet said that it was a fun poem to make I can assure I can't write anything like this! I just can't and with that being said this poem is just a masterpiece!