Unavoidable Rain (Diatelle)

by Meena Krish   Jun 9, 2015


Pain
no pill
seem to kill
this burnt despair,
words that are poured to fill
the heart has no strength to repair,
loss, leaves lonely tears which no one can share-
occasions give way to unavoidable rain,
forever, a long time to be aware
that fate has robbed someone we care,
emptiness crawls and chills,
its frozen stare
and dark will
instills
pain.

The Diatelle is a fun, syllable counting form like the etheree
with a twist. The syllable structure of the diatelle is as follows:
1/2/3/4/6/8/10/12/10/8/6/4/3/2/1, but unlike an ethere, has
a set rhyme pattern of abbcbccaccbcbba. This poetry form may
be written on any subject matter and looks best center aligned
in a diamond shape.

The Diatelle form was created by Bradley Vrooman.

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  • 1 year ago

    by Koan

    This form is one of the very best I have ever read!! Sadly no one noticed it but Michael maybe!!! Why do I say this; well my believe is when you write an Diatelle or a Etheree you must aim to one goal only and that would be to have every lines become a single line of statement :

    ~Pain~

    ~no pill~

    ~seem to kill~

    ~this burnt despair,~

    ~words that are poured to fill~

    ~the heart has no strength to repair,"~

    and so on.... Brilliant what this poem is!!!

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Meena,

    I like the challenge of these strict forms. You have penned an excellent poem within the tight constrains.
    A depression deeply rooted and one that medicines or conversations cannot cure. Tears fall and with them the acceptance of a constant dark shadowed soul.

    Well done.

    Michael

  • 2 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Meena I have said it before and i'll say it again, you have such a way of writing about emotion that the reader is simply compelled to keep reading and reading, this is a wonderful form and as all form writing the best ones are the ones that don't read as a form, just a poem, as usual you have written a beautiful and provoking piece 5/5 all day long. Wonderful.

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    Weekly contest June 14th
    Judging comment:

    A truthfully elegant poetry format by Meena, as usual the suitable theme for the suitable format with vocabularies flowing excellently to craft this beauty. Very catchy.

  • 2 years ago

    by The Fairy Mary Poppins

    Judging Comment

    The form itself was just breathtaking! To be honest it could've been in free form and I would still have nominated this poem. It packs a punch in so little lines, taking you in a journey of cosmic proportions, the title itself is so bittersweet mayhap because I love rain or because it's; whatever the case may be I still adore this poem. This poet said that it was a fun poem to make I can assure I can't write anything like this! I just can't and with that being said this poem is just a masterpiece!