Shade of the past calls, sets aflame...
to plague and slay life is its aim,
deprived happiness comes to claim
a broken dame, a broken dame;
Brief smiles dance in the arms of flame
while swallowed feelings live with blame,
caged thoughts sit still seeking no fame
crying in shame, crying in shame;
Pregnant moon dance on window frame
bringing to mind those hostile names,
storm of an angry past brought fame
leaving her lame, leaving her lame.
The monotetra is a new poetic form developed by Michael
Walker. Each stanza contains four lines in monorhyme. Each
line is in tetrameter (four metrical feet) for a total of eight
syllables. What makes the monotetra so powerful as a
poetic form, is that the last line contains two metrical
feet, repeated. It can have as few as one or two stanzas, or
as many as desired.
Line 1: 8 syllables; A1
Line 2: 8 syllables; A2
Line 3: 8 syllables; A3
Line 4: 4 syllables, repeated; A4, A4
My sub-judge comment:
Fabulous use of the form and the word choice as well. There's not a single forced rhyme, no departure from substance to inject mechanical coupling. (Although the dash in line two should NOT be there). The poem evokes a Grizabella - like image, the fallen, aged glamour queen immersed in misery, plagued by memories which, in retrospect, now are seen to lead inevitably to her current doom.
This is truly a depressing exhale...Im very moved! I have never tried this form or heard of it
Although your brilliant approach make this an easy form, it isnt! ~smiles~ You have fallowed the rules precisely and yet made it so poetic! Only real talents can do that... Now that I read this a few times I find myself wondering if the word "lame" should be changed to "tame" What do you think?