I love the descriptive flow of this. The innocence of a romantic encounter with all the embarressment and the little twist with the fly. You have a knack for bringing vivid realism to your poetry which draws in the reader. Capturing a moment in time that seems so real and will surely resonate with anyone who has had an experience of awkwardness when meeting a stranger. Very well written and enjoyable piece. Milly x
1 year ago
How refreshing, youthful, feminine and delightfully descriptive this piece is!
I liked your poem a lot Hellon. So descriptive and one that made me want to read on to the very end.
I also loved your clever lines used, 'your smile danced towards me', that was just one of the great lines you used. Well done!