An Unexpected Encounter

by Hellon   Feb 8, 2017

You said you saw me waving
from across the crowded bistro..

I felt your gaze and
as I turned
our eyes locked briefly
my glance fell
loosing the moment


your smile danced towards me
and, as you followed it,
panic spilled my drink
as trembling hands
fought for control
but failed.

Suddenly you were by my side
mopping my embarrassment
in your napkin.
I blushed as you said "hi"
and ordered me a fresh juice.

I could smell the sea
on your skin and,
as the ocean reflected
in your asked
if you could join me then,
sat down before I could answer


as our smiles collided,
somewhere between
strangers and friends
you asked for my number.

Should I give it to you?
I think I will!


Someday I may tell you
I was not waving at you
I was just swatting a fly


not today.

@Hellon 8th February 2017

Note: An older poem re-vamped .


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  • 1 week ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    I thought I recalled this in an earlier version. Still leaves me smiling at the splendiferous chance that sometimes propels our lives into directions we would not have gone otherwise.

  • 1 week ago

    by Em

    This is a pretty funny scenario and it reminded me of a programme I watched a couple of years ago which was based on finding out the cause to a crash and it turned out a woman was wafting a wasp away as she was allergic. Anyway, nice to see you writing again.
    Take care, Em

  • 1 week ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hellon, I often want to trawl back through my earlier pieces and 're-vamp' a few pieces, and one day I will. For now though, I will read other poems like this. I must add a before and after, would show the extent of the changes and appreciation of the sculpting that goes on to create a final piece. Question - is a poem ever finished?

    To the poem - I like poems that have misdirection; they're like a good joke where they take the reader on a journey and then the punch line delivers a satisfying end.

    Your journey is that old tale, told millions of times and each in it's own unique way. Here boy meets girl, or more specifically, girl waves at boy - and there you have it, connection. The electricity starts, chemistry and biology now can work and perhaps love will ensue.

    The punch line of the wave being more of a swat of deterring a pesky fly was/ is a good one and made me smile. But as many of your poems, they leave more for the reader, like an after taste of a flavoursome meal; something to mull over, a bit of mystery - I like this most of all, or do I?

  • 1 week ago

    by yogi73

    haha!! I love this poem and the witty ending! well thought out and well penned!

  • 1 week ago

    by Everlasting

    "Should I give it to you?
    I thank I will!"

    The word thank sounds strange to me. I read it as I think... is it a typo? Or "I thank I will" is how it should be said?

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