You are my one and forever-
there was no other
that has touched my heart
as you have-
there will be no other
in my life
that will ever make me feel
as you do-
You took my hand
so many years ago-
we vowed our love and fealty
to each other-
we would stand by each other
in sickness and in health-
through all the ups and downs
life would offer up-
you still like to tease
about the "obey" part-
I really don't recall any "obey"
in those vows-
oh God do we laugh!
Little catch words
that only two
who are deeply in love
others never see
what makes us tick
so well together-
and that's ok-
For if there is never
I know I have been loved-
deeply, madly, wholly-
completing my circle of life
like no-one else
you are my one and only-
always and forever...
My Forever by Brenda points 4
Brenda I have noticed recently has been on a role and her pieces have spoken to me so much this week. This piece was like a magical rainbow because it shows that after sadness and heart ache there's a pot of gold and it seems Brenda has found her pot of gold which makes my heart melt especially the way she writes about her forever man. Just perfect and a very good structure in my opinion
Brenda, another fantastic poem from you.
The three dots in the last line of the poem begins a new journey by saying 'I love you'.
So for me, there is no end to this poem.
I can smell the scent of love and loyalty (mood of the poem) throughout the poem except for this part of the poem 'I really don't recall any "obey"
in those vows'.
It's shows how comfortable you two are with each other that you can joke about anything.
True love is all about trust. What is the most beautiful thing about this poem is its simplicity. I am sure this is what touched judges hearts too, like me.
People compare their lover to moon, sun stars, flowers and million other things to let them know how much they love them.
You on the other hand simply said that you were deeply, madly, wholly in love with him and he is the only one around whom your whole life revolves.
Without him your life will stop.
Another thing which I noticed about the structure of the poem is that you never broke the stanzas. It shows that how strong this bond is between the two of you.
What people don't understand after reading a 200 pages book, you explained it in just four stanzas - the reasons behind a successful marriage.
Like Ignoring mistakes, accepting flaws, laugh about all the worries and become each other strength in tough times.
And he is your one and only one, the true one, because he stood by your side in every test of your marriage life.
Without a doubt, he deserves every bit of your love, every word, every emotion of this poem. He is your true inspiration behind this beautiful creation.
True Love melts everything, just as it melted my heart, it did the same to the judges.
Brenda, a very well deserved win.
I hope it's just a start because I would love to read many more poems like these from you- always and forever...
Naazz, thank you ever so much for such a lovely in-depth commentary. He truly is my one and forever. After 2 failed marriages I really did not think I would ever marry again let alone find someone like him. We both knew what we didn't want after dealing with bad relationships and what we did want we found in each other. He really makes love oh so easy.