Dark Side of the Sun

The poem is so interesting and well-written...the flow was great ..I really loved it and my fav part was
Darkness wraps me up in its arms.
Hope lies on the dark side of the sun.

U got a fantastic imagination..Good job,keep it up:)..

Very nice.

Absolutly beautiful
i so wish i could write as beautifully as you do
5/5

This is truly powerful dark piece, filled with amazing descriptions. I admire originality of this poem and your superb choice of words in every stanza. Also, the rhythm and flow are flawless from the beginning to the end.

"Let it be a haven for things left unsaid."
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repetition of this line left great impression on me. This sounds elegant and serene and it holds deep emotions and message.

- Phantom whispers creep along walls,
Thoughts too disturbed to please ears.
Twilight always seems to hide these-
Cryptic, camouflaged fears.-
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I love this stanza, it pulled me straight into the poem. It's perfectly worded, but the word " creep" threw me off a bit. I just personally dislike that word. Maybe the word 'crawl' would fit this stanza better. Anyway, this is excellent beginning with remarkable dark atmosphere.

- Silence screams secluded secrets.
Choking on stardust that gleams.
Lips sewed together, never to speak,
But ears still hear those screams.-
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"Silence Screams"- how powerful. Amazing stanza, haunting, with eerie atmosphere. Great continuation of the poem, very descriptive. The third line is mind-blowing, it holds effective image and overwhelming helplessness which I could really feel while I was reading this.

- Lethal words carried up to the moon,
The harsh sunlight will never be won.
Darkness wraps me up in it's arms.
Hope lies on the dark side of the sun-
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This is my favorite stanza... it's simply flawless and every word seem perfectly picked. Also, I love the word 'lethal' lol Overall, I like how you added the title in the poem, it is effective as the ending line. The imagery within this stanza is superbly vivid.

All in all, greatly done!
5/5 from me

Wow, a very well written poem, i loved it..the flow, the imagery, you put it perfectly well together... especially loved the last part...

Lethal words carried up to the moon,
The harsh sunlight will never be won.
Darkness wraps me up in it's arms.
Hope lies on the dark side of the sun.

all in all a very good poem, keep up the great work...5/5