You!

by BleedingAngel   Jun 24, 2008


I wish life was more simple
Like being a child again
No deep worries in life
It was so easier back then

Now every day is a fight
Trying to make it through
Just one day without crying
And breaking down over you

I wanna go back in time
To when we first met
I should have walked on
Instead I'm left with regret

If I had never let you in
I would be free from this pain
I never thought that love
Would make you go insane

We shared something special
So fragile, good and unique
We had that strong bond
So many people seek

Our love was near perfect
We almost got it right
But now I am left alone
Crying myself to sleep at night

You changed somehow
My love remained the same
You broke that special bond and
Left me broken in self-pity pain

I'm stuck and can't move on
Though I really wish to forget you
Memories of us drives me crazy
But tell me, what can I do?

No more reasons to live now
Soon I'll be falling fast asleep
I've given up, my life is ending
But inside, memories of you I keep

Copyright 2008 - Sabrina Stelmach

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  • Very good well written

  • 11 years ago

    by Cayce

    I wish life was more simple
    Like being a child again
    No deep worries in life
    It was so easier back then
    `` I wish this all the time. It was so much easier when I was a little kid....

    I wanna go back in time
    `` I think you should write "wanna" as "want to". It's just good grammar.

    If I had never let you in
    I would be free from this pain
    I never thought that love
    Would make you go insane
    `` Blaaaah. I know this emotion right now. It sucks, I know, but you've just got to live with the mistakes you make, I guess..

    Our love was near perfect
    We almost got it right
    But now I am left alone
    Crying myself to sleep at night
    `` I tihnk that last line slightly throws off the flow. Um, maybe you could change it to "Crying to myself at night". Just a suggestion though.

    Memories of us drives me crazy
    `` Take off the s in drives. :]

    Maybe put some more punctuation in it? It'll help the flow, even though the flow was pretty good without it. :] Your rhymes seemed unforced and natural. This was a good poem. Great job.

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenie

    Sis this was an AWSOME poem like many others! i really feel ur pain. i am guessing and pretty sure its about kenneth but when u quoted
    "I wanna go back in time
    To when we first met
    I should have walked on
    Instead I'm left with regret"

    all i can say is do not live in regret-let him go.u deserve someone who wil wait for u and be there for u.

    5/5