The rain has an inconstant and sudden beat
As they moves their limbs wildly and aimlessly
Leaping and rushing around with bare feet
Ruptures flow through their bodies shamelessly.
*I love love this stanza. The word choice is amazing and really highlights the way you're feeling. This was such a strong and emotional piece and I can tell you really put alot into this piece. I felt so many emotions and they were all clearly expressed. The flow was great and didn't get in the way of your feelings or words. I think this is one of the strongest poems I've read from you. Keep it up dear. Nik*
This was very interesting, i never read anything like this one before, and i could picture it happening. It seems like the message from this poem I mean i could be wrong but it seems like you should do everything like play in the rain as long as you can because you never know when you will pass away. thats what i got out of it and its very true.
keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.