Haven Rain

And I keep them close to my heart, not my eyes.

My favorite line. It was so well thought out and when I read it I had to reread it it was so good.

"I've always known myself
To be a lost soul. "

This is another of my favorite lines.
It sorta hit home to me and hit me with an impact and sorta describes how I felt.
but never really could put into words.

A commone style of poetry would be the idea of unrequited love, but i enjoyed how you chose to write from the opposite perspective. I particularly liked the reference to photographs being left for the wind. It really added feeling and an image to the mind. However, there wasn't really a huge part of this poem that stood out to make me sit here and just think "wow..." but it has the potential.

Overall, a good read and I'd say 4/5! Keep it up

--Hari

"Haven't I told you
Not to wait for me forever?
And you still trail after me, grasping
At the trail of translucent thoughts
And astral dreams long departed. "

^^What a beautiful opening, so strong and filled with so much emotion, the imagery is wonderfully created, it paints vivid pictures in my mind and pulls me into the piece.

"I've always known myself
To be a free soul. "

^^Beautiful way to carry the poem forward.

"Yes, I've changed,
And I leave behind no regrets,
Only cloudy skies
And the sound of your hair in the wind."

^^I didn't like how you repeated "and in the second and fourth line, I don't think it's needed, maybe eliminate them?

"I cherish our memories, truly, I do,
And I keep them close to my heart, not my eyes.
You'll stay there forever, always a part of my smile,
And I'll give the faded photographs
Back to the wind."

^^I adore this stanza for the depth and emotion in it, however I didn't like the use of so many fillers (I, the, you etc) maybe:

""Cherish our memories, truly do,
keeping them close to my heart, not my eyes.
You'll stay there forever, always a part of my smile,
I'll give the faded photographs
Back to the wind."

"Please, don't chase after a wanderer.

I've always known myself
To be a lost soul. "

^^frikken love these closing lines, beautifully written, hard hitting, something that has impact upon the final words and stays with the reader.

Amazing work, this was a very eye-catching poem that has so much emotion and in-deepthness. You really made me feel what you were feeling and your word choice was so perfectly-choicen. Nice job, your vocab spoke for itself and brought this piece out. 5/5 from me, take care...

I like the emotion, and the words speak so much. Your vocabulary is very nice; it has some more complex words mixed with some simple words, but never too much or too little.

I got slightly lost at the line scheme, since it changed a few times. I think it might give it more flow if you evened out the lines a bit more. Other than that, lovely poem.