Hell Returned

Wow so great :) so deep

I liked the whole poem but these are my favorite lines
People don't understand
Why things are wrong in their lives
When you embrace the hell
You let sadness thrive

it is so true

I love the power of your pain and despair.
i can feel the pain as i read the poem
i can see the hate and need of this feeling
i love it
great job
5/5

Truely beautiful poem, it was delicate way of expressing pain. Very dark and gave remnaces of Edgar A Poe. dont know if that was intenional or not, but it was beautiful. I hold sympathy for you, i know what its like to feel like no one is there. Remember these words if you take nothing else from me has a person. No one is meant to suffer forever, we are all meant to be happy. Always drive on and always work for your own satisfaction first.

Sadness burning inside me,
Hell, I have returned
The darkness is inside
I'm continually burned

(Wow very strong start. i love the imagery)

Do you remember me
I knew you so well
so many memories
My own personal hell

(I love this part, i feel like i'm with you, nice)

I remember how you embraced me
When I had no where to stay
No one else was there
Even as i was on my knees to pray

(great flow and diction here)

My feelings never went numb
They just burned in your flames
Hatred and jealousy
Those were my favorite games

(i think this stanza is my favortie..very emotional and deep)

I left you to follow a narrow path
Its a lonely one, the trail
Full of honesty and light
I prefer the road full of betrayal

(great, you have a real gift for words)

Some one once said
All i needed was strength
But I want to depend on depression
My weakness is full of length

(nice, love the imagery)

So here I come
Running back to your fiery arms
Let them burn my flesh off
Your black eyes have such a devilish charm

(Wow, great personification)

People don't understand
Why things are wrong in their lives
When you embrace the hell
You let sadness thrive

(this is so true..love it)

Will you join me
To see the end of your life
To see all the struggle of pain
and hurt along with strife

This was a really great poem. i loved everything about it. the concept was great too. keep it up. Shanik