Shadows of Silence

I loved it. the very first line caught my attention and bringed me into your piece.the imaginie was good i could see the what u desrcibed.

haunts moonlight,
curtains hide my
abandoned walls,
Scratched it is,
anesthetized still.

this is my bery bery favoirte part of your poem. you did and amazing job.
keep it up.
5/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

I really loved the first stanza when you compared your lost relationship [or I'm assuming that what it is.] to expired lemonaide. It just kind of really blows my mind. I don't think I could ever come up with something like that. Haha. So I really loved it.

The other parts were good too [great word choice], it's just that part was what really stuck with me. Great job. :]

Keep writing.
Cayce

Very original idea of comparing soured love to tangy lemonade. Well written

"Tangy lemonade
of our fairy-tale,
sipping even after
its expiry date,
Revolting it is,
Irresistible still."

-The wording you use in this is amazing, what I like most about your style of writing is that it's different and it makes people really think into the meaning of the poem. The symbolism of the lemonade is one that was beautifully thought of. Very well done.

"taunting solitude
haunts moonlight,
curtains hide my
abandoned walls,
Scratched it is,
anesthetized still."

-I feel the emotion coming from this stanza, and I can't emphasise enough the wording you choose here is very good.

"Only traces remained,
of shadows of silence. "

-This right here really got me. I mean shadows of silence really ties up what you were saying.

*Very,very well written poem. Different structure than I'm used to, but that's what I always like about your poems, is how different they are.

5/5

Wow. That's awesome. 'Tangy lemonade' is quite an original line, I think at least. I love the lines;

'sipping even after
its expiry date,'

I'm not sure why I like those lines. It just brings more power to the whole poem. The flow is excellent along with the wording used.

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