Love, Lost in time

by Lonely Rider   Feb 16, 2010


Love, Lost in time

Lonely was the night, hooted an owl nearby,
slowly she glided , under star-studded sky,
Silver gown flowed, over the velvet moss,
waved dark tresses, reflecting angelic gloss,

Staring at the words, embossed in gold,
trickled solitary tear,silent and cold,
{...caressing his wounds,her heart had shivered
resting in embrace, their breath quivered ... }

Blossoms lay dried,withered was her heart
engraved on a stone - Till Death do us part.
Each dusk, when sun goes down the hill,
arrives her apparition, serene and still.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    This was almost a nature poem to me. I love the first stanza about the owl. I would have never thought to use that animal in a poem. Very clever and beautiful in a way. The imagery was breath taking and really made this poem come to life for me. I love the syntax as well. Your lines were smooth and flawless making this a total masterpiece. Wonderful work dear. Nik

  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Lonely was the night, hooted an owl nearby,
    slowly she glided , under star-studded sky,
    Silver gown flowed, over the velvet moss,
    waved dark tresses, reflecting angelic gloss,

    ^^What a lovely image you have drawn here!

    Blossoms lay dried,withered was her heart
    engraved on a stone - Till Death do us part.
    Each dusk, when sun goes down the hill,
    arrives her apparition, serene and still.

    ^^So sad & a chilling image..a love lost..beautifully penned!

  • 14 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    The flow was perfect and I really loved your descriptive chioce of wording, you created some very beautiful imagery =]
    Excellent job! 5/5 This was a very enjoyable read

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Raj, how sad, the ghost of a woman returning to the place she remembers her love. Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by Sean

    Beautiful. Honestly.