Crestfallen

by The Queen   Sep 14, 2010


I have travelled back in time
the hypochondriac world
over land and seas
I discovered a garden of ethos
one that depicts
a heart and a Cupid's arrow
a gentle magic and stilling fervor
that had mordantly turned
Into a tool of broken heartedness

Too little time to heal
yet so much time to dream
I had concocted
a surreal romantic allegory
a rococo grown-up fairytale
wherein your eyes promised
a land of best fantasies
paradoxically,
a place to bury our romance
with guns

I am now like an asteroid
star-like and shiny
though deadly and unattractive
a threat to his desire
of not to mate for life
like as if Venus and Neptune
would ever synchronized

I cannot piece together tomorrow
but one thing is for sure,
real change takes time
with skulls and knives
never will I allay
the desperate lust
for love

I'm just a little not too over you.

Copyright (C) 2010 by EvanescentMoon

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  • 12 years ago

    by MyaEve

    Very touching and beautiful!
    Crestfallen is such a magical word, indeed!
    I love it, a lot!

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    All I can say is your free flow is amazing and I love your style This is beautiful

  • 13 years ago

    by DeafBeats

    Too little time to heal
    yet so much time to dream

    ^^^^
    beautiful lines ...

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    4.5?!!

    I have found this one of the deepest free versed poems..this is a heartfelt piece..with so many many sad expressions that you really penned down with a very DEEP imagination.

    The things of our natural world that you have connected to your own feelings..gave me a high sense of creativity..!
    such as this :

    a threat to his desire
    of not to mate for life
    like as if Venus and Neptune
    would ever synchronized

    a poem to relate to 100 % ..

    my favs:

    I am now like an asteroid
    star-like and shiny
    though deadly and unattractive
    >>>such a sorrowful stanza..I saw my self with a broken heart..within these lines

    I cannot piece together tomorrow
    >>very sad...worded in a very beautiful way!

    but one thing is for sure,
    real change takes time
    >>found this simple and wise!!

    I'm just a little not too over you.
    >>I did expect such an ending, but your wording was special!!Really Special

    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    I am now like an asteroid
    star-like and shiny
    though deadly and unattractive
    a threat to his desire
    of not to mate for life
    like as if Venus and Neptune
    would ever synchronized

    Do you have any idea of how beautiful and amazing this poem is?
    Specially the ending! Touching indeeed... I wish I could nominate poems already... Meeeh!:p
    That stanza stood out the most for me, maybe because I really did understand it.. Very well done...