As the clouds pass by

"As the clouds pass by
thousand thoughts fly,
painting silver memories,"

^^What a beautiful opening into the poem! Quite a short stanza, but yet you manage to pour emotion and depth into it, whilst simutaneously creating some vivid, beautiful imagery.

"of unstated words and
passion suppressed,
behind the walls of
whitewashed dreams,"

^^ This follows the opening verse very well, each line seeming to become stronger and stronger as you progress throughout the poem. I particularly loved 'whitewashed dreams,' for some reason that really stood out to me and I found it beautiful.

"Whispering a secret,
caressing my soul again
the clouds pass by."

^^ I really liked the repetition of the first line, on the last line here. It brings you back to the imagery you created at the beginning, and leaves me with quite a peaceful, serene feeling as I near the end.

"Time can heal life- "

^^What a lovely way to end this! Short yes, but incredibly moving and powerful and it leaves the reader with a strong feeling of hope.

I really enjoyed this, at first I wasn't sure that you'd manage to get your point across when I saw the length of the piece, but you pack so much depth and meaning into the entire piece that it makes for a wonderful read.

L find this poem simple yet very expressive. Flow of the poem is very good. Very well described... Nice and thoughtful.

This is really beautiful, indeed time can heal..and it always comes as a surprise. One day you suddenly realize the sting is no longer there and you are free.

painting silver memories,

of unstated words and
passion suppressed,
behind the walls of
whitewashed dreams,

^^

I loved this part in particular, very moving and well thought out.

Excellent:)

5/5 Ingrid

Of unstated words and
passion suppressed,
behind the walls of
whitewashed dreams,

Such a deep poem where locked feelings are
let out into the air. I especially liked the above stanza...very nicely penned!

Clouds, love to watch them float by and imagine shapes they could be. It is relaxing and healing.