Mail from Sri Lanka

by Jenni   Sep 4, 2011


You made me see the beauty
of the sky, that muffles us,
because though it is ubiquitous
it still offers freedom;
shared the idea of mountains
being decoration of the nature,
just like everybody has
rough edges.

Wind cannot be seen
but felt, just like our intuition
leading us and giving hints
for us to follow.

There is also an elephant,
they symbolize strength,
wisdom and long memory,
don't they? We both need it,
in order that we do not forget,
about each other and our
experiences.

This smell, yours mixed
with nature, comforts my
senses because
I'm familiar with it;
your handwriting seals
what you thought forever.

I never expected a postcard
to have this effect on me
and make me understand
things so much better.

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  • 12 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    The ending really tied the title into the poem, but I have done the same thing not really tied the title into the poem until the end. I definitely see your improvement from reading these older poems to reading your newer ones, Jenni. :D

    5/5

    -Heather

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Yep you are imoroving this is so nagnificent. I love it so much and you really have done an extraodinary job as it has,been said begore there is no need to restate all the magnificent tecniques you have used in this piece.

  • 12 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    Awesome!!!!!!!!!! i loved this so much jenni havnt seen a title like this i loved stuff unique n diffrent i thought you worded it very well maybe few things could be diffrent but like connie said it does depend on the reader very well written x

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittany C

    "elephant" stanza seems to be a little out of place. Other then that I like it. The wording was good and it flowed nicely from beginning to end.

    I gave it a 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    Maybe there was a few things that could have been different ,rather it would make it better or not I think is opinion of the reader. I enjoyed it very much, I think you're a wonderful talent .

    Connie

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