My love (palidrome-line by line)

Such a very sweet write, Brenda. Lovely!

Hello Brenda,

I can see you have written a few 'Palindrome - line by line' poems.

I must admit, to not being that aware of this style, apart from knowing that they are darn tricky! Well, done for taking on such a feat, as wanting to excel with them.

I did a quick 'google' search and discovered this definition: A palindrome, by definition, is a word, phrase, verse, sentence, or even poem that reads the same forward or backward. It stems from the Greek word palindromos: palin, meaning again, and dromos, meaning a running.

Okay, to the poem in question:

The title - "my love" this, to me, states that this poem is about, the writer's lover. From this I can conclude that the poem will be about how they feel about their lover, as apposed to a friend, a sibling or a child. I presume too, that there will be mentions of trust, respect and possibly (hopefully) romance.

The main poem:

I won't go into the technical aspect of this, because I am unsure of what the 'line by line' means in respect of 'a sentence reading the same forwards as it does backwards'. Instead, I will go through this as a 'free from' poem.

From the start, this is clearly a dedication to your lover - a statement for him, but the world can read/hear this too. After all, when we love, we ought to love completely. Here you raise your love up on a pedestal, he is: reliable (constant, the sun rises and sets) and makes you dizzy with love and fun (our world spins gentle circles intertwining love and laughter).

The poem then takes a turn - it speaks of life without this constant, without this fun and love. 'Bereft' is certainly how I would sum up this loss - it would be a lonely world that would be a 'struggle'.

Now I have come to the end of this, I feel rather sad - I really feel this parallel universe where you are without your love.

My suggestions are as follows.

1.Unless you want the reader to feel this way, try and think of the conclusion first and then work back. If you had started this poem with the negative and then worked up to the wonderful constant that is your love, to me, that would have improved it.

2.Adding a footnote to this piece would help readers understand the form and then comment with the knowledge of the constraints you were under.

Brenda, this is a personal piece and one that sings of love in the highest degree. I sincerely wish you and your love every happiness, now and in the future.

Take care,

Michael x

We all need someone to hold to. It's a gift to find such rare gem. Reminds me, of what lies ahead. Thanks a big time for sharing this!

Wow! Nicely composed. You are very good at writing love poems like this, and why not, you have got a great experience of writing.

I think that the world is containing lots of love poems so everytime we have to think something unique so that it doesn't get match up with the other love poems.

I am viewing some great lines here. Nice Poem.

Brenda what a beautiful piece of love