deep ocean

Nice one, Gopi!

Seconded em

A really good solid start but tire seemed clutched at. But all in all an enjoyable read

Regards

Craig

See I knew you could do it lol this is alot better :)

I like the start because the solidness of the heart shows you've been hurt as 'walking in the dark,' as it shows that the darkness follows you around with the hurt and heartache... I think 'an' should be placed before ark and though this is good the last line put me off a little as the 'tire' rhyme here seems really forced so just a suggestion how about 'set off my deepest desires?'

Suggestion stanza 2:
'I wondered if this would last forever
But it didn't even last the day' I liked the last two lines.

The last stanza seems like you just placed it there for the sake of it in my opinion but I do like the sentiment of showing that love can send us crazy and do crazy things.

All the best
Em