A carefully guarded place

Judging comment

"A carefully guarded place" By Brenda 10 points

The tittle of this poem caught my attention first.

I expected something about loved ones, siblings, family, children or even that place we all find a little peace in.

I was completely wrong.

This poem is an extremely emotionally charged piece that does not release you.
It grips and will not let go.

Brenda is one of those souls that can seem to write about anything, she does it so so well too. Very often her work is lovely but in this she takes a darker tone and one gained of experience.

Very brave and powerful writing.

Brenda you're a legend

Craig

Hi Brenda,
A carefully guarded place.
I think once we grow up to a certain age we all build this place inside of us or this place build inside of us because of our experiences in life which we hide away from others and that weight of those dark experiences after some time start to fill upon our heart.
We want to share that (pain, hurt, depression, anxiety, grief- the tone or mood of the poem) with others, but we could not.
And I loved the way you used the word key to describe the patience.
That you want to share or speak to others but you have that patience to guard all that dark emotions, but at the same time you are feeling it's weight upon your heart now.
And I agree with you, the loss of our dear ones profoundly affects us.
It makes us more aware about the outcome of the situations or I should say brings us knowledge or insight.
Theme or subject of the poem is darkness which has taken everything precious from you.
First, it has take away your dad from you at very young age.
A time when we are in the process of learning new things about the world, and in those times we need our parents the most.
Mostly, mothers are housewives, and fathers they have much better knowledge of the world where we have to go and find our own place.
So the role of both the parents is important in our lives.

Second, it came for your innocence, it could be anything, but I think what you mentioned that you have to work at Young age to support your family.

Then it came for jobs that you got, leaving you with money issues.

And finally, it came for a feeling you have in your heart for others - trust.
It tucked away your family from you.
Trust issues happened and you ended up on two unsuccessful marriages and saw your own child turning against you, left you with nothing.
You never even showed anyone how hurt you are, you just cry deep inside in those hidden places.

And at last you said, "I don't like to open
this Pandora box."
It's good that you finally opened it and shared all your darkest experiences with us.
I think this is the best thing about the poem, and this social networking platform(pnq).

I just hope after sharing a portion of the darkness hidden inside you you must have a felt a little less weight upon your heart.

Inky blackness(aura of darkness) is kind of addition to this poem, sounds original and especially loved the way you used it.
This is another beautiful side of this site, as I learned this new phrase.
The aura of darkness hides all your hurt and disappointment, your pain and grief and leave you with a bright smile on your face. Just as in your profile picture.

All I want to say, that It really takes courage to write all of this you have been through.
But at the same time it's good that you did so.
Never miss the chance to share pain and happiness with others and always keep on smiling.
I just hope I didn't disturb you with this interpretation.

Congratulations on your HM this week. It's a wonderful piece. Milly x

I commend you for sharing I know it could not have been easy. There is this dark piece that just won't go away but it explains a lot. Whatever happened to us it has not defined us. You are beautiful. I had to let go he had power and control over me for way to long. You are being loved and cherished by so many and that's what matters. Hugs my friend

I loved that you are strong enough to share this with us our Queen and I appreciate you even more for your strength. I feel you, and all these darkness that lurks within. Some circumstances in life do leave us in the dark but we always survive because we are strong. Hugs my friend!