Winter’s Spirit

by S.T.A.R.   Apr 3, 2019


I left my dresser-drawer slightly open,
for your spirit to slip and escape this suffocation.

And when you get away don’t let the reflection
on the mirror fool you, it is a hallucination.

Breathe in my flowery incense,
let it slide and fill the gaps of my absence.

I left you a note on my windowpane,
begging you to flee with all my memories,
and even if they were cold and heavy
carry them and yourself out of this misery.

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  • 2 months ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I LOVE the gentleness that your voice has in this, and the reminder that letting go doesn't always mean we lose everything. We can gain ourselves back from whatever we anchored ourselves to. At first, I thought this was about the passing of seasons, that "flowery incense" resembled spring. I also saw it as winter reassuring itself that memories don't always have to be "cold and heavy", and that moving on and accepting the passage of time would grant it freedom. But I also liked where others went with this poem, a love that must move on because remembering and even wishing to be taken back in time would only weigh this person down more.

    • 2 months ago

      by S.T.A.R.

      To be honest, I was shocked with how everyone took this poem. For the first time since I started writing, I was successful in conveying my message. And in this case like your comment, both of them(Letting go and spring)!!
      Thank you so much, your comments always make me smile :)

  • 2 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well done on this, STAR - a well deserved win indeed.

    Take care

    • 2 months ago

      by S.T.A.R.

      Thank you so much Ben!!

  • 2 months ago

    by Daniel

    Congratulations on your win! The rhyming here is really subtle and clever.

    ‘don’t let the reflection
    on the mirror fool you IT IS a hallucination.’

    I feel is a little awkward. Should it be ‘that it’s’ or ‘fool you. It’s’ or ‘fool you, for it’s’?

    To be honest, I’ve no idea what this is about. I got the impression it’s about letting go of love, but almost as if the narrator is ‘letting go’ themselves, and seems content in its death.

    Well written :)

    • 2 months ago

      by S.T.A.R.

      Thank you so much Daniel, and now that you said it that makes sense :)

  • 2 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    I could read many things into this.

    But I'm just gonna say it's lovely in its way

    Craig

    • 2 months ago

      by S.T.A.R.

      Thank you so much!!!

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