Its Raining

by Robert   Oct 13, 2004


It’s raining like the day you went away,
although I am soaked I want to stay.
My hands are cold and the flowers I hold are wet,
and as I stand here I only feel regret.
I feel sorry for everything bad I ever said,
and I have no clue as to what lies ahead.
The rain hides my tears and the sadness I feel inside,
but my misery has nowhere to hide.
It walks with me and consume my life like you once had,
now I just walk in silence making myself go mad.
Your words I can never hear anymore,
and my life seems like an open sore.
My emotions, like my life are twisted in pain,
and the future I see ahead seems in vane.
I wish you were here to help me with this mess,
for the bills are stacked up and our children are gone and I can’t cope I must confess.
I will be here tomorrow, same time and same place,
for this is the only way I can be close to your grace.
Your picture I had put on where you rest,
I tried to do everything you asked, I did my best.
Here are your favorite flowers I guess its time for me to go,
but know love my life without you is a constant woe.
Sleep for that is all I can say,
for I will be with you soon I pray.

Written By
Robert Lee Niswander
Copyright 2004

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  • 15 years ago

    by a broken smile with a broken heart is a poets life

    The begining was siply flawless.
    So much sadness and sorrow in your words.
    Another amazing piece.

    "Always wishing you were here to help me with this mess
    Children gone, bills stacked up, I can't cope I confess"

    the flow of your wonderful poem was a little disturbed by the line above. my advice is for you to remove it and then your poem would be simply perfection..

  • 15 years ago

    by Blissful

    The emotion here was amazing! You truly had me feeling for the couple in this situation. The way you created this scene was flawless because I could easily see everything clearly in my mind making me enjoy the piece that much more. Loved it.

    Well done.
    *5/5*

  • 15 years ago

    by 4 track demo

    A very moving and emotional poem, i can relate to this is many ways, and i'm sure others can also, very good read, i enjoyed it a lot...keep it up!
    john

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "It’s raining like the day you went away,
    although I am soaked I want to stay.
    My hands are cold and the flowers I hold are wet,
    and as I stand here I only feel regret."

    ^^BEAUTIFUL opening, such beautiful imagery, and so much feeling.

    "I wish you were here to help me with this mess,
    for the bills are stacked up and our children are gone and I can’t cope I must confess."

    ^^Flow seems shaky..maybe something like:

    Always wishing you were here to help me with this mess
    Children gone, bills stacked up, I can't cope I confess

    Other than that, this is perfect.

    The emotion in this piece is overwhelming, without being overbearing. Your use of imagery is splendig, and apart from those lines I mentioned above, flow is perfect throughout.

  • 19 years ago

    by Nefarius

    damn, this poem has moved my deeply,
    sry
    a moment please, i must dry my eyes...

    ...this was very good work

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