I look into the mirror,
But who is that looking back at me?
I'm not sure who it is,
This reflection that I see.
I see another soul,
Dwelling down deep inside.
Who did it belong to?
Why does it want to hide?
I can not play these silly games,
Why won't it come out and talk to me?
This sight is blinding,
I can not see.
I turn and look back again,
And your face is what I see.
You are the soul,
The one dwelling inside of me!
okay. Some people have been a bit confused when reading this. Sorry. I was trying to get across that it was still ME. That just at some point a different part of me had been 'unlocked' in a sense and I was realizing the change but still it was me.
The end sort of caught me off guard, it's rather confusing honestly. As I was reading I thought the inner soul/ other soul, was the girl's. Like annother part of her she hadn't noticed before or something and then you made it seem as if there's another person in the entirely lol. Definitely different. The poem overall is well written and the concept, although strange, is unique. 5/5
I liked the seeming idea of an inner self willingly hiding within the character. It's slightly different from the previous works I had come across in the past with the same theme employed. But I was a bit confused with the conclusion: it seemed to me to be portraying that the character's inner self is of another person's nature rather than her own.
An interesting read, nevertheless. Thanks for sharing.
Wow. i freaking LOVE this! its really really good. 5/5. you say you dont write about personal experience so i thought maybe it would sound kinda forced ya know but, not at all! this is amazing. keep it up <3