Behind My Mask

by Sarah Dowlly   Mar 30, 2006


Behind this smile theres an ocean
Desolate and bleak
Murky waters stain my pride
My soul's aching and weak.

Behind these eyes theres nothing
The effulgent spark has gone
Consumed by bitter anguish
My essence is dead, my body lives on.

Behind this laugh I'm floundering
But no one will ever know
My broken spirit longing for the day,
That i can let my mask go.

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  • 17 years ago

    by A Broken Bleeding Soul

    It's very short but it's straight to the point. Great choice of wording. Well done 5/5

    ~ Tina

  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    Behind this smile theres an ocean
    Desolate and bleak
    Murky waters stain my pride
    My soul's aching and weak.

    I loved these lines the imagery was so rich. I guess at some point everyone hides behind a mask and you expressed the sadness that comes with constantly pretendig well.

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Your "theres" in this should be "there's".

    It was a very sad poem with excellent vocab. I'm amazed with this poem. It was very well written. Keep it up! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Awesome poem. Loved the words you used. Seemed more like a 'mature' poem than 'teenage poetry'. Well described scene.

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Impressive write. Written simply with good use of diction to convay the message powerfully.
    First line of the second stanza, it should be "there's."
    On the very last line remember to capitalise I to keep it gramatically correct. A well crafted piece, thanks for sharing.

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