He loves me, He loves me not

by Sarah Dowlly   Mar 30, 2006


When were apart i miss you
much more than words can say
I dream of us together
But dreams are all they stay.

When I'm with you I'm lonley
neglected and ashamed
I'm searching for that connection
but clearly our love has waned.

When did you stop loving me?
stop caring about my needs?
I'm drowning in bitter confusion
while your fulfilling your greed.

You know that you don't want me
but can't bear to let me go
What gives you the right to keep me here
maybee soon you'll let me know.

Sarah Dowlly

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  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    First of all, if you're wondering why I'm doing this poem and not the others you asked, it's because I've done them already, with the name -^->TaLe3e! ..yeah. Just click on that name and it will take you to this same profile. =)

    Anywho, back to the poem. I liked it! I thought the flow was really good and the rhyming didn't seemed forced. Lots of emotions aswell, which is always good! A great job overall. Keep it up! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "but cant bare to let me go"
    can't needs an apostrophe, and I think 'bear' is the word you want instead of 'bare'. (bear = to tolerate, bare = uncovered)
    ~~~
    I thought you rhymed very well, and did a good job on this poem. The message was very clear and unobscured.

  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    Check typos and grammatical stuff (like missing apostrophes). without them sometimes it's hard to read a poem properly. i really like it, although the last line (chills me to my core) doesn't seem to fit - but perhaps that's just me. it seems to only work because it rhymes. *shrug*

  • 17 years ago

    by gemowski

    This has got to be my favorite one.
    i can relate to this so much.
    it reminds me of and lads who makes me feel exactly like your written words.
    brill work mate
    10/10 this time loved it

  • 17 years ago

    by xoxtatiixox11

    Wow this is a gr8 poem i love it i dont give u a 5 i give u a 10 keep up the good work!!!!! :)
    Takecare and thank u for the comment,
    Thalia