Again, I wasn't so keen on the structure but you made up for it b showing the emotions portrayed into this which seemed to have been written in deep thought. Simple but effective. I liked how you talked about trust, it seems as though people always leave which is what your trying to state. Good effot.~mel
12 years ago
I loved it, omg it was awesome. the way you structured it was great, the words you used were awesome and overall just amazing. 5/5
This piece was almost akin to a Monologue, I believed. Going on about whether to trust the person or not created a huge confusion in the subject's heart. I quite liked it, because it gave me a glimpse of a troubled individual's thoughts and feelings...touchy...poignant...insightful...