Miss you

I wasn’t too impressed with the title, but I really liked the poem. I think that a different title would draw more people in to this piece.

In the first stanza, I like how you used TASTE as a noun and a verb. Good job.

Reading through the second stanza, I got the feeling (again) that your words just flow out of you without much effort. Many poets (including myself) tend to over think their words.

"Your eyes an empty bliss" I would suggest adding ARE before AN EMPTY BLISS.

"To me love is strange" I would suggest adding a comma after ME, it helps separate the words.

I enjoyed the very last line as well (the dedication). Many people are afraid to use these, but I really think it is beneficial.

Great job again, the flow was great and the wording was good as well.

A few things to look at, but still a good overall poem.

I can relate to this one. The emotions were great. The wording was good and the flow was strong. I gave this poem a 5/5.

I close my eyes
And see your face
I lick my lips
And taste your taste
^^ ahh memories : )

I inhale a breath
But it belongs to you
Why do you haunt me
The way that you do
^^ ok a twist usually it is good to remember someone that you love but the word "haunt" makes it seem bad

That sweet warm touch
Your eyes an empty bliss
Why do I remember
Every single kiss
^^so they really meant something to you

I thought I could be strong
Handle life alone
But the farther I go
Its seems as if a danger zone
^^ a danger zone is a good way to describe it ! good pick

I lay alone
Alone on my bed
To me love is strange
My heart seems dead
^^ i would just get rid of the second alone in the second line it would flow with out it!

In my sleep I feel
Your body close to mine
The dreams of your face
I only see as a sign
^^ what sign?

The morning comes
Another lonely day
"I miss you"
Are the only words I can say
^^aww... the longing for a loved one is always heart tugging

another great job ! emotions were solid and there weren't any real bumps! 5/5

Wow this is a great poem

Wow great poem...it has great emotion in it also! keep it up!! 5/5