Desperation

by Finalgravedigger   Aug 15, 2007


Your desperation
can lead to hallucination
with clouded thoughts
your not as smart.

You have one sided days
that wont go away
entering a haze
going down hill today.

The lights are out
your giving shouts
wanting help
as its all about.

Blinded by the darkness
covered in shrouds
cold to the core
cant take it anymore.

More worries enter the mind
the hole is deep
as your digging all night
without a fight.

Eventually numb
your ultimately dumb
wont take any hands
because you’ve gone mad.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Dan

    Nice. Good flow and that. If you can find a way to add a little more... emotion... to it... then i think it wud be perfect

  • 16 years ago

    by C Cattaway

    Hope you don't mind..

    'your not as smart..' should be 'you're not as smart..'

    I really appreciated this poem.. I don't think it needs more.. it's quirkiness makes it more jagged, and that's exactly what depression is all about.. it's a lack of structure, and an inability to understand, and this has that rugged edge to it, that shows exactly the point you're trying to make.. at least, that;s how I read it!! lol.. Well done, hunny.. and thank you for my comment. xx

  • 16 years ago

    by asia

    Wow this iz really good, i like it.

  • 16 years ago

    by the come back

    Nice poem 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    This was a good poem. yeah.. the emotions and the imagination were great but i suggest to add some more clear details coz it's kindda confusing.

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