I loved the alternating repetition of the 1st two words (I hope & I pray) in each stanza then ending differently with another type of words (I beg). This totally attracts attention of the reader. the flow reveals smooth and unrestricted sequential dripping of thoughts. The most important thing here is the coordination between different stanzas, which made the poem tightly sewed together with experience. You I still can imagine you reciting it in front of the public. It's really full of emotion and sorrow. One of my favorites.
12 years ago
by Tara Kay
This was good. The emotions were powerful, it flowed well and the imagery was good too.
you have a gift
Wow, way and again WOW! Amazingly written, you are so talented, I'm adding you to my favorite authors list. I like everything about this one: You described emotions excellently and you created great atmosphere through the piece.
Well done, 5/5 from me