Unbreak My Heart [Trijan Refrain]

by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG   Sep 10, 2007


Unbreak my heart, give it back now;
You`ve done enough damage,
I can see from the sweat on your brow --
You`re sinking with the bridge,
Falling slowly -- into the flames,
You`re breaking hearts and taking names.
...........................Falling slowly;
...........................Falling slowly --
Into your lies and pathetic games.

Unbreak my heart, give it back now;
Fill in the cracks you broke,
Take a step back and take a bow;
Try to act cool for your folk;
You`re all the same -- in mind and heart,
Taking hearts and ripping them apart,
........................You`re all the same,
........................You`re all the same --
Reciting lines from the start.

Unbreak my heart, give it back now;
I`m sick of all this pain,
When we try to make it work, somehow --
We both have nothing to gain.
So far gone now, into the dust;
`Cuz you mistook love for lust,
...................So far gone now,
...................So far gone now --
Held down by these chains turned to rust.

-Jenna Elphick
September 9, 2007

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The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain/8

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